“16 WISHES”
A Synopsis :
Characters :
ü Abby : Debby Ryan
ü Jay : Jean-Luc
Bilodeau
ü Caleste : Anna Mae
Roudledge
ü Crista : Krissa Tynes
ü Sue
Jansen : Kendall Cross
ü Bob
Jansen : Patrick Gilmore
ü Mike
Jansen : Cainan Wiebe
ü Logan
Keenan : Tracey
ü Joey Lockhart : Joel Sumande
“Candles’ magic don’t make mistakes, people do”
She is Abigail Jansen, (Abby). 15
years old. She is attractive and cheerful. But today is Abby’s birthday. She has
the same birthday Krista Cook, her neighbor. She really hates Krista, because Krista
always beat her. Abby really doesn’t like her. Besides that, she has wish list
which is adhered behind her cupboard. There are many 16 wishes. (1) I’ll
met Joey Lockhart; (2) I’ll have the
cutest clothes in school; (3) I’ll decorate my room the way I want; (4) I’ll
like sushi; (5) I’ll have a credit card like mommy’s; (6) I’ll be a good
dancer; (7) I’ll get my driver’s license; (8) I’ll have my own car preferably;
(9) people will stop treating me like a kid; (10) I’ll be popular; (11) I’ll
have my own bathroom; (12) I’ll beat Krista Cook at something, anything,
everything; (13) I’ll come home as late as I want; (14) my parents will
understand me; (15) I’ll have the best party ever; (16) love Logan Buchanan.
She wishes that it will be come true today.
06:59 A.M she walked to the door, and suddenly “Happy Birthday” Mike (her
brother), Bob (dad) and Sue (Mom) was holding a cute cake. They give a small
surprised to Abby. Unfortunately she wasn’t too interested for that surprised.
Abby hope that today is special day
and really hopefully that her wish list will come true. Luckily, Celeste or she
calls with “Birthday Fairy “come at that day. She comes when a group of bee
were ignoring Abby’s house. She saved Abby’s wish list. Then she gave back to
her. On the street, she met with Jay, her best friend. He gave a gift to Abby.
That is a necklace, with the key ring “BFF” stand for (Best Friend Forever).
Then, Celeste came with her bus and gave a box as a birthday present to Abby.
In fact she got a box of Birthday Candles and lighter. Birthday candles written
on “make
a wish, light a candle, and watch your sweet sixteen, birthday wishes come
true”. At first she said that was a stupid gift, then she took one
candle from that box, and lit the candle number one and with number one on my
list come true. Magically, a bus approached to them, and Joe Lockhart came down
from the bus and kissed her. She is very surprised. And now she believed that
the numbers on the candles corresponded with the number on her wish. One by one
she lit that candle. First she had met with Joe Lockhart, the wish number 1, and
then number 8, 3, 2, 12, 10, 7, 9, and 14.
In the locker, Krista spied her. She
saw that Abby brought lighter to school and tried to blow out the candle. When Abby
took candle number 2, the candle didn’t work. Soon, Miss Duffy (sport teacher)
hold Abby’s hand, she took that, and carried her to the counseling. Fortunately
Abby met with Birthday Fairy. Abby told that moment, why that candle didn’t
work. And, in fact the candle has the rules; one candle one wish per hour and
the magic in the candle expire at midnight tonight. Unfortunately, when
Abby lit the candle number 9 she became adult.
Suddenly her parents picked her up to school and carried her to her new
apartment. Abby was sad. She didn’t want to be a woman, or even an adult girl.
Now Abby 22 years old. Abby shouted loudly, she needed talk to Celeste.
In fact, the candles have their own
logic. They don’t always give you what you want. Sometimes they give you what
you need. The candles and wishes go together.
But, Abby needed to take that wish back. But Celeste said that was impossible. Then,
Abby paid attention toward to the wish list; she saw that there is a way to
back her in to 16. Logan’s photo was adhered on the paper. Magically, Abby
changed it became her photo when her father took that photo in 16th.
Now 11:59 P.M, soon, she takes the candle number 16 and wish that she goes back
to 16. Finally, now Abby become 16, she also make a friend with Krista, throw
the wish list, and lives as 16 years old.
HASIL PERBAIKAN :)
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HASIL PERBAIKAN :)
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“16 WISHES”
By
Prima Hidayoza
Characters:
ü Abby : Debby Ryan
ü Jay : Jean-Luc
Bilodeau
ü Caleste : Anna Mae
Roudledge
ü Crista : Krissa Tynes
ü Sue
Jansen : Kendall Cross
ü Bob
Jansen : Patrick Gilmore
ü Mike
Jansen : Cainan Wiebe
ü Logan
Keenan : Tracey
ü Joey
Lockhart : Joel Sumande
“Candles’
magic don’t make mistakes, people do”
She was Abigail Jansen, (Abby). 15
years old. She was attractive and cheerful. Today, it was Abby’s birthday. She
had same birthday with Krista Cook, her neighbor. She really hated Krista,
because Krista used to beat her. Abby didn’t like her. Besides that, she had
wish list which is adhered behind her cupboard. There are many 16 wishes. “ (1)
I’ll met Joey Lockhart; (2) I’ll have
the cutest clothes in school; (3)
I’ll decorate my room the way I want;
(4) I’ll like sushi; (5) I’ll have a credit card like mommy’s; (6) I’ll be a good
dancer; (7) I’ll get my driver’s license; (8) I’ll have my own car preferably;
(9) people will stop treating me like a kid; (10) I’ll be popular; (11) I’ll
have my own bathroom; (12) I’ll beat Krista Cook at something, anything,
everything; (13) I’ll come home as late as I want; (14) my parents will
understand me; (15) I’ll have the best party ever; (16) Love Logan Buchanan.”
She wished that it could be come true
today. 06:59 A.M, she walked to the door, and suddenly “Happy Birthday” Mike
(her brother), Bob (dad) and Sue (Mom) was holding a cute cake. They give a
small surprised to Abby. Unfortunately she didn’t too appreciate for that
surprised.
She wished that today was special
day and her wished list could come true. Luckily, Celeste or she called with “Birthday
Fairy “came at that day. She came when a group of bee were ignoring Abby’s
house. She saved Abby’s wish list. Then, she gave back to her. On the street,
she met with Jay, her best friend. He gave a gift to Abby. That was a necklace,
with the key ring “BFF” stand for (Best Friend Forever). Then, Celeste came
with her bus and gave a box as a birthday present to Abby. In fact, she got a
box of Birthday Candles and lighter. Birthday candles written on “make
a wish, light a candle, and watch your sweet sixteen, birthday wishes come true.”
At first she said that was a stupid gift. Then, she took one candle
from that box, and lit the candle number one and with number one on my list
come true. Magically, a bus approached to them, and Joe Lockhart came down from
the bus and kissed her. She was very surprised. She believed that the numbers
on the candles corresponded with the number on her wish list. One by one she
lit that candle. First, she had met with Joe Lockhart, the wish number 1, and
then number 8, 3, 2, 12, 10, 7, 9, and 14.
In the locker, Krista spied her.
She saw that Abby brought lighter to school and tried to blow out the candle.
While Abby took candle number 2, the candle didn’t work. Soon, Miss Duffy
(sport teacher) hold Abby’s hand, she took it, and carried her to the
counseling. Fortunately, Abby met with Birthday Fairy. Abby told that moment,
why that candle didn’t work. In fact, the candle has the rules; “one
candle one wish per hour and the magic in the candle expire at midnight
tonight. “ Unfortunately, when Abby lit the candle number 9 she became
adult. Suddenly her parents picked her
up to school and carried her to her new apartment. Abby was sad. She didn’t
want to be a woman, or even an adult girl.
Now Abby 22 years old. Abby shouted loudly, she needed talk to
Celeste. In fact, “the candles have their
own logic. They don’t always give you what you want. Sometimes they give you
what you need. The candles and wishes go
together.” Abby needed to take that wish back. Celeste said that was
impossible. Then, Abby paid attention toward to the wish list; she saw that
there was a way to back her in to 16. Logan’s photo was adhered on the paper.
Magically, Abby changed it became her photo when her father took that photo in
16th. 11:59 P.M, soon, she took the candle number 16 and she wished
to go back to 16th. Finally, Abby became 16, she made a friend with
Krista, throw the wish list, and lived as 16 years old.
Language expression :
(Permission)
·
Excuse you….
(Certainty)
·
I’m going to make sure nobody comes to your
party.
·
You sure you’re ready for this?
(Anger)
·
It’s not cool, it’s terrible, I don’t know what I
did to deserve this.
(Disagreement)
·
No, no, I’m
not a woman …..
·
I didn’t appreciate it
(Greetings)
·
Hi Krista….
Hi,
I’m so glad you can make it.
(Pleased)
·
Cool car, it’s perfect. Love it.
·
Cool ride
·
This is a great picture
(Belief)
·
So, do you believe me?
·
So, Mike can really play?
·
If I could turn back the clock and change that
day I would.
·
I’m so sorry
·
Any chance you can forgive me?
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